Teaser Tuesday 11-17-2009


Here’s an excerpt from Chapter 1 of



Rose was pulled out of her thoughts by screams coming from the alley below. She leaned over the side and saw a man holding a young Veneficus girl against the wall.

Ugh. Why is it these mort guys just don’t understand the meaning of the word no!

Rose grasped her Kwan Dao and stepped off the roof. She landed soundlessly in a crouch a foot to the right of the man.

“I’m pretty sure when they scream like that it means they don’t like what you’re doing.”

The man turned around, surprised and eyed her up and down.

“What are you supposed to be? Some kind of cop or something?” He slurred.

He reeked of liquor as he leaned in to get a better look at her. She looked to the Veneficus girl and smiled.

“You can go honey.   I’ll make sure he can’t follow you.”

The girl nodded and quickly ducked under his arm and ran towards Main Street.

“Oh…you are huh? You just sent my entertainment away. Maybe you want to take her place?”

Rose couldn’t help but laugh.

“This must be your first time here. You see, around here we don’t have cops.  We have Warriors, and I happen to be one. If you think you can take me just cause I’m a girl…please be my guest. I would suggest in stead, that you call for a cab and get the hell out of here before you piss off anymore of the locals.”

The drunk stumbled clumsily toward her as she raised the blunt end of her Kwan Dao to his throat.

“You morts really aren’t that bright when you drink are you?”

She lowered her staff as he leaned back against the wall. His eyes were barely open. He raised one finger and tried to talk.


Laughter erupted from the front entrance of the alley. She quickly leapt back onto the roof and looked down. The man was joined by a group of drunken teenagers. She watched as they took him by the arm and led him back inside the club. Shaking her head in disgust she returned to her sentry position to continue her watch.

“You know, it’s not really fair if your opponent can’t stand up much less see you clearly?”

Instinctively Rose jerked her broad sword from the sheath strapped to her back and whirled around, extending it toward the voice.

“You really need to get some R & R girl.  You’ve become way too jumpy.” Vitus placed his hand on the blade of her sword and lowered it to her side.

“Sorry, for some reason I’m wound too tight tonight. All of these morts here make it dangerous for our kind. They’re very unpredictable when there’s alcohol involved.” She sighed as she replaced the sword in its sheath.

“I know. Well, your shift is over I’ll take it from here. Darius was asking if you were going to go see him tonight?”

She smiled and cocked her head to one side. The mere thought of Darius sent trills of pleasure down her spine. It had been hours since she left him at The Showroom. She was anxious to see him again. Even though they’d been together for over a year she still longed for him when they were apart.

“What do you think?”

She picked up her Kwan Dao and leapt off the roof into the alley.

“Let me know if you need some backup.” She called as she ran toward The Showroom. Vitus’ laughter echoed behind her.



  1. loved this… my only question is why she’d pull a broad sword when she already had a weapon at hand? The Kwan Dao has a longer reach and a good blade, so it’d be a good weapon against any sword….

    just wondering….

    most warriors aren’t going to drop their preferred weapon of choice, which appears to be the kwan dao in this case, for the backup…..

    • The Kwan Dao is beside her against the wall of the roof. The broad sword is actually MORE accessible b/c it is attached to her back. Sorry for the confusion. 🙂

  2. Ooh, this sounds like it’s going to be a lot of fun. Am curious who/what Rose is!

  3. I think you have a great flare for dialogue and the way your characters sound and act which is great! There were some fuzzy moments in the sequence of events, somewhere between when the teens come into the alley and she turns to find the guy watching her. I had difficulty picturing exactly what was going on.

  4. Nice set-up here. I’m curious enough that I’d want to know where this is going. I’m like Tracey, I want to know what Rose is too!

  5. Oh, fun! Your MC is tough: I like her. 🙂

  6. This is good. It really makes me want to read more. The first line through me off though. Pulled from her thoughts made me want to know what thoughts. I’d elaborate or kill it. Otherwise, nice job!

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